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ghost girl

whats the worst that i could say

when I woke up he was gone I was a little disappointed about him being gone because to be honest I enjoyed his company.

I looked around to see that I was laying up agents' a tree.

"I see your awake" frank spoke
"yeah, what time is it?" I asked standing up and walking over to him
" Mave baby there's no time here" he chuckled
" well how was I supposed to know that" I said crossing my arms
"whoa whoa no need to get all pouty is it that time of the month again?" he laughed smirking
" wow and I thought you were sweet, jackass" I glared at him
"haha yup its that time of the month again"
I looked down to check if there was any blood and then I realised I was dead so could I even have my period or get pregnant?
"can I even get my period or get pregnant when im dead" I asked confused
"well yeah but only if you come to hell because my kingdom is pretty much on earth, but right know your right in the middle between heaven and earth so anything can happen" a new voice said. I turned around to see a taller man with long greasy black hair and in a all black suit with a bit of eyeliner.
"ummm hi and who are you?" I asked nervously
"oh yes I am Gerard but you might know me as the devil or Lucifer" he said kindly
but this was the devil so this time I was pretty terrified so I backed right up into frank shaking.
frank chuckled and the man or umm Gerard I guess smirked
don't worry kid im not goanna hurt ya cuz it seems like franky boy over he-" he got cut off by a embarrassed sounding frank. " Gerard shut the fuck up kindly" Gerard smirked and chuckled "oh I see frank is keeping secretes from little miss Mavis"
"what?" I asked "nothing" frank replied smiling



Notes

hey guys so I am back in berlin so there will be more updates

Comments

thank you for pointing this out I type this all on my phone because at the moment my laptop is broken but I will go back and fix all of it so thank you for pointing this out and no you never came across as rude

@Artzzz

Vannagore Vannagore
7/18/14

Hi, I'm sorry to point this out before I even started reading your story. But, that's the whole point of my comment. I saw the summary for your story on the "Gerard Way" tag but the problem is that even in the summary, you have a billion typos and mistakes in grammar...
I hate grammar police assholes who correct people's comments or tweets, but fanfiction is basically literature, and in literature you have to take grammatical rules and spelling seriously. Your idea is great, and I would read it, but it's not "pretty" to look at, and that costs you readers.
I have no intention of coming off as rude or a little-miss-know-it-all, but please, for the love of whatever you believe in, either get a beta or proofread EVERYTHING you write twice before considering posting them.

Artzzz Artzzz
7/18/14