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@Dark Violet
Oh noes! I didn't mean to make you pull a Frankie and pout in the corner!!! Ahhhh!!! I'm glad that the ass slapping brought you out of your fangirl funk! I don't like pouting readers!!! And to hear you say that about my writing really means the world to me. Like more then you know. I was absent a few days because one of my other stories on another site got a bad comment. Now this other story I've been writing for YEARS, and has just shy of 3000 readers and I finally got a bad comment. Like a nasty one. And it really killed my writing moto and my spirit. I knew that they were being stupid but it really took the wind out of my sails. So, to hear you say that about my writing really means the world!!!
Blaming it on the alcohol is almost like a brain's self defence against unknown and different emotions! And it is ever so true, we do ignore the moments until they become memories that we look back on sadly. We miss out on so many things and amazing people that way. And I know the feeling of wanting to take her by the shoulders and shake her like a baby (HORRIBLE saying) until she realizes exactly what is in front of her!!! People can be so blind sometimes! Though I also agree that it's good for her to be self focused at the moment, really turned internally as she expands her personal being. But after a while you need to look outwards, so you don't miss the world passing you by!
And no, happy endings don't always involve people getting together but I want the same thing you do!!! This story isn't done, not by a long shot so we shall see!!!
I hope my new chapters let your fangirl side squee a little bit!!!
Oh noes! I didn't mean to make you pull a Frankie and pout in the corner!!! Ahhhh!!! I'm glad that the ass slapping brought you out of your fangirl funk! I don't like pouting readers!!! And to hear you say that about my writing really means the world to me. Like more then you know. I was absent a few days because one of my other stories on another site got a bad comment. Now this other story I've been writing for YEARS, and has just shy of 3000 readers and I finally got a bad comment. Like a nasty one. And it really killed my writing moto and my spirit. I knew that they were being stupid but it really took the wind out of my sails. So, to hear you say that about my writing really means the world!!!
Blaming it on the alcohol is almost like a brain's self defence against unknown and different emotions! And it is ever so true, we do ignore the moments until they become memories that we look back on sadly. We miss out on so many things and amazing people that way. And I know the feeling of wanting to take her by the shoulders and shake her like a baby (HORRIBLE saying) until she realizes exactly what is in front of her!!! People can be so blind sometimes! Though I also agree that it's good for her to be self focused at the moment, really turned internally as she expands her personal being. But after a while you need to look outwards, so you don't miss the world passing you by!
And no, happy endings don't always involve people getting together but I want the same thing you do!!! This story isn't done, not by a long shot so we shall see!!!
I hope my new chapters let your fangirl side squee a little bit!!!
OK well her slapping Gerard's ass brought me back. That and your incrdible writing. I really like your style of writing, it's very genuine. It's simple yet it pains a very vivid picture of real people and real situations.
Gerard def developing feelings for her, but she doesnt see him. I mean she sees him, but she doesnt. She looks right through him, it seems. They share a lot of things, and I know she loves him as a friend but she doesnt see him as a man. Like the the way she brushed off their almost kiss (I loved that chapter!) and blamed on the alcohol.
Again, your story makes me think and relate to daily life. How we dont always see people for what they are. We tend to ignore moments until they become memoris and then everything becomes crystal clear and obvious. I think it's sad how we sometimes miss out on people or experiences because were so involved with ourselves.
Thats what I think what's happening here, she's very involved with herself. Which is great, you have to know who you are before you get involved with anyone else but she's missing out on Gerard and his feelings.
I dunno how I feel about it, I'm torn. On one hand, I admire her courage and her focusing on herself and just living life. On the other hand, I wanna shake her and be like LOOK at him!
I'm not sure what I think about the whole situation, I want to see a happy ending. And I know a happy ending doesnt always involve people getting together but I do wanna see them together.
LOL I'm rambling hardcore, I'm not sure I even made sense.
I just want her to notice him!
Gerard def developing feelings for her, but she doesnt see him. I mean she sees him, but she doesnt. She looks right through him, it seems. They share a lot of things, and I know she loves him as a friend but she doesnt see him as a man. Like the the way she brushed off their almost kiss (I loved that chapter!) and blamed on the alcohol.
Again, your story makes me think and relate to daily life. How we dont always see people for what they are. We tend to ignore moments until they become memoris and then everything becomes crystal clear and obvious. I think it's sad how we sometimes miss out on people or experiences because were so involved with ourselves.
Thats what I think what's happening here, she's very involved with herself. Which is great, you have to know who you are before you get involved with anyone else but she's missing out on Gerard and his feelings.
I dunno how I feel about it, I'm torn. On one hand, I admire her courage and her focusing on herself and just living life. On the other hand, I wanna shake her and be like LOOK at him!
I'm not sure what I think about the whole situation, I want to see a happy ending. And I know a happy ending doesnt always involve people getting together but I do wanna see them together.
LOL I'm rambling hardcore, I'm not sure I even made sense.
I just want her to notice him!
What are you doing to me?! My little fangirl heart was so excited about the Gerard action and then the guys came over and she's kissing Mikey! I don't even know what to say to you! Im gonna do a Frankie and go pout in the corner while mumbling to self! I'll be back and properly comment when I get over myself!
@Purple_Cupcakez
Haha thank you so much for that! Glad to hear that you love it!
And don't you worry my dear, there is lots more where these chapters have come from!!!
Haha thank you so much for that! Glad to hear that you love it!
And don't you worry my dear, there is lots more where these chapters have come from!!!
@username
You know what? A more coherent review later sounds awesome.
But this here comment that you left? PRICELESS.
I love the comments and posts from people are just pure unadulterated "Whahoo!!!"
Because that means my story made them feel that way!
So all your "I love this so much ahhhh" gave me all sorts of feels.
You win. XD
You know what? A more coherent review later sounds awesome.
But this here comment that you left? PRICELESS.
I love the comments and posts from people are just pure unadulterated "Whahoo!!!"
Because that means my story made them feel that way!
So all your "I love this so much ahhhh" gave me all sorts of feels.
You win. XD
@Dark Violet
Oh my goodness!!! *faints* I can't believe your responses! You make me so happy! Reading your comments is like Christmas every day that I log in!!! I agree about Frankie, maybe a lease for Bob would be a fantastic thing!!! A little sugar is not a bad thing, a lot of sugar. . . Well it makes for fun times!
And yes!!! They do connect and communicate on a whole different level then physical! They share a bond, a connection that goes deeper then holding hands and making out. And that's what makes complicanted people so beautiful! And I couldn't agree more about the soul mates part! They really are, like old souls that have known each other through time. But you're also right in the sense that can soul mates make it in the real world as a real couple? Can they take what they have and make it more, more material and physical without losing some of it's beauty? It will be the test of time and I hope that you enjoy it more as it unfolds on the page so to speak! You're completely right about Sharon as well. I wanted to make an unthreatening character, a sort of neutral person that you neither loved nor hated. So many people make the "girlfriend/boyfriend" in the way a person to hate or to be pitied. I wanted non of those emotions. I wanted someone you could read about but not really see. She becomes more of a character later, but still under the same character typing. I'm so glad you caught onto that!
Your second response just made me swoon while reading it! To hear that something I have written stays with you once you've logged out and left the page is the most amazing thing to ever read! Every writer once to leave an impression, or at least want to make people think. And if I have in some little way accomplished that then I am ecstatic! But you're completely right about happiness. I do think it's an illusionary carrot that is put in front of us, some created dream of the media. Do this, go to school, get these grades, do this job and you'll be happy. But that's not true. You get lost along the way and a lot of people never find their way out. And as you said, I'm not bashing the system (as I too did just what they said) and I think that going to high school and going to college is one of the greatest things a person can do in life. Learning is an ongoing process that only makes you stronger. But not being yourself or getting too caught up in the corporate swing of things, the pushing of papers and decorating of your cubicle or office can kill your spirit. You're right, too many people forget to pick up a brush and forge their own way because it really is too scary and unpredictable. And I think that if a person is able to get lost in a fictional world even for a short period of time each and every day it doesn't make them less successful or less strong it just shows that their greatest tool, their imagination, is still active and in full swing. To lose ones imagination and wonder is a sad, sad thing in life.
And hey, I might be able to do something about that fan girl side of you yet! Just keep hangin in there and we'll see!!!
And I TOTALLY agree with you about My Chem. They really were a "fuck all the rules" and do it your own way band right from the start. They were a band of misfits, loners and individual thinkers. They gave a voice and power to those just like them. They have taught so many to fight for who they are, to stand up and not be afraid to be different or unusual. And most of all they taught so many, all of us, to be strong. And to keep on going. It really is why they still to do this day, after 12 amazing years, have the fan pase that they do. And they will continue to have just that and more as they progress.
And hey, autocorrect is a pain in the ass but I think you did beautifully! I could never write all that from a phone! So you are light years ahead of me!!!
Oh my goodness!!! *faints* I can't believe your responses! You make me so happy! Reading your comments is like Christmas every day that I log in!!! I agree about Frankie, maybe a lease for Bob would be a fantastic thing!!! A little sugar is not a bad thing, a lot of sugar. . . Well it makes for fun times!
And yes!!! They do connect and communicate on a whole different level then physical! They share a bond, a connection that goes deeper then holding hands and making out. And that's what makes complicanted people so beautiful! And I couldn't agree more about the soul mates part! They really are, like old souls that have known each other through time. But you're also right in the sense that can soul mates make it in the real world as a real couple? Can they take what they have and make it more, more material and physical without losing some of it's beauty? It will be the test of time and I hope that you enjoy it more as it unfolds on the page so to speak! You're completely right about Sharon as well. I wanted to make an unthreatening character, a sort of neutral person that you neither loved nor hated. So many people make the "girlfriend/boyfriend" in the way a person to hate or to be pitied. I wanted non of those emotions. I wanted someone you could read about but not really see. She becomes more of a character later, but still under the same character typing. I'm so glad you caught onto that!
Your second response just made me swoon while reading it! To hear that something I have written stays with you once you've logged out and left the page is the most amazing thing to ever read! Every writer once to leave an impression, or at least want to make people think. And if I have in some little way accomplished that then I am ecstatic! But you're completely right about happiness. I do think it's an illusionary carrot that is put in front of us, some created dream of the media. Do this, go to school, get these grades, do this job and you'll be happy. But that's not true. You get lost along the way and a lot of people never find their way out. And as you said, I'm not bashing the system (as I too did just what they said) and I think that going to high school and going to college is one of the greatest things a person can do in life. Learning is an ongoing process that only makes you stronger. But not being yourself or getting too caught up in the corporate swing of things, the pushing of papers and decorating of your cubicle or office can kill your spirit. You're right, too many people forget to pick up a brush and forge their own way because it really is too scary and unpredictable. And I think that if a person is able to get lost in a fictional world even for a short period of time each and every day it doesn't make them less successful or less strong it just shows that their greatest tool, their imagination, is still active and in full swing. To lose ones imagination and wonder is a sad, sad thing in life.
And hey, I might be able to do something about that fan girl side of you yet! Just keep hangin in there and we'll see!!!
And I TOTALLY agree with you about My Chem. They really were a "fuck all the rules" and do it your own way band right from the start. They were a band of misfits, loners and individual thinkers. They gave a voice and power to those just like them. They have taught so many to fight for who they are, to stand up and not be afraid to be different or unusual. And most of all they taught so many, all of us, to be strong. And to keep on going. It really is why they still to do this day, after 12 amazing years, have the fan pase that they do. And they will continue to have just that and more as they progress.
And hey, autocorrect is a pain in the ass but I think you did beautifully! I could never write all that from a phone! So you are light years ahead of me!!!
@pikey forever xXx
I'm so happy that I make you happy!!! Yaaaay!!! I'll be posting more chapters in a little bit! And I'm writing new ones tonight as well!!! I hope that makes you smile my dear!!!
I'm so happy that I make you happy!!! Yaaaay!!! I'll be posting more chapters in a little bit! And I'm writing new ones tonight as well!!! I hope that makes you smile my dear!!!
*face plants* not Alison, I meant to say the reason. You'll have to forget any autocorrects in these last few comments. My phone has a mind of its own. I try to control it, but sometimes it escapes and rages on
@Burnt_Bridges_Fall
My god phone, I appreciate the enthusiasm but I wasn't done...
that's Alison why I think my chem are so timeless and have a fan base of all ages even after 12 years of operation. They were misfits, it took them a long time to find their place in the world. They didnt do things the proper way, they preached to fuck everyone else and do what makesyou happy. They showed us that being different is ok, to let the difference shine, to get creative in our lives whichever way we can. Imagination is a gift. They inspired so many to keep fighting and be different and wear it on their sleeve.
I think I'm done now?
My god phone, I appreciate the enthusiasm but I wasn't done...
that's Alison why I think my chem are so timeless and have a fan base of all ages even after 12 years of operation. They were misfits, it took them a long time to find their place in the world. They didnt do things the proper way, they preached to fuck everyone else and do what makesyou happy. They showed us that being different is ok, to let the difference shine, to get creative in our lives whichever way we can. Imagination is a gift. They inspired so many to keep fighting and be different and wear it on their sleeve.
I think I'm done now?
@Burnt_Bridges_Fall
Ugh writing a reply on the iPhone isn't as easy as they make it look... Anyways, one of the reasons I love this story so much is its because its so relevant to our lives nowadays. They start pumping you full of information and ideas of what you should become to be happy in this life. I think it starts in high school, they push you to get grades and all that but honestly, I graduated high school with honours but I don't use any of the information I learned. But the piece of paper helped me get better job cuz it's frowned upon not to (not preaching to drop out of high school boys and girls! Stay in school and stay out of trouble, dammit!). Now, I'm in the industry I went to school for so by all definition I should be delirious with joy. I'm not.
My point isn't the system doesn't have a point or its completely useless. My point is that so many individuals lose themselves in it, because its scary to wander off and pick up a brush and find your happiness elsewhere. I see unhappy people all around me, and the papers they do or don't have on their wall is irrelevant to their state of happiness.
Happiness is so hard to find, sometimes I think it's a made up state by media. It's like a carrot they wave. What's happiness? Is it so wrong that my happy place right now is to lose myself in a fictional world? Does it make me less successful or less strong?
And that's why I love this story so much, it makes you think about life and that's a sign of a good piece. When it doesn't leave you once you're done reading, it follows you into the real life and makes you think.
The fan girl in me really wants to see them together, but I like this story to countinue reading anyway!
Ugh writing a reply on the iPhone isn't as easy as they make it look... Anyways, one of the reasons I love this story so much is its because its so relevant to our lives nowadays. They start pumping you full of information and ideas of what you should become to be happy in this life. I think it starts in high school, they push you to get grades and all that but honestly, I graduated high school with honours but I don't use any of the information I learned. But the piece of paper helped me get better job cuz it's frowned upon not to (not preaching to drop out of high school boys and girls! Stay in school and stay out of trouble, dammit!). Now, I'm in the industry I went to school for so by all definition I should be delirious with joy. I'm not.
My point isn't the system doesn't have a point or its completely useless. My point is that so many individuals lose themselves in it, because its scary to wander off and pick up a brush and find your happiness elsewhere. I see unhappy people all around me, and the papers they do or don't have on their wall is irrelevant to their state of happiness.
Happiness is so hard to find, sometimes I think it's a made up state by media. It's like a carrot they wave. What's happiness? Is it so wrong that my happy place right now is to lose myself in a fictional world? Does it make me less successful or less strong?
And that's why I love this story so much, it makes you think about life and that's a sign of a good piece. When it doesn't leave you once you're done reading, it follows you into the real life and makes you think.
The fan girl in me really wants to see them together, but I like this story to countinue reading anyway!
Oh man 4 chapters, I feel like the luckiest girl alive! There are many things I want to say but I just got back from work, and I had to read it and I just wanna write a couple of things before I forget but I shall be back tomorrow morning cuz I'm a damn babble mouth.
First, Frankie needs to lay of the sugar. Like really for the sake of everyone involved, that kid needs to stop with the sugar. I do love him in this story. He's insane and he always makes me smile. Maybe Bob should put him on a leash or something. Control your Frankie, Bob!
Second, I love Jay's relationship with Gee. There are a lot of layers there. They became friends. They're intimate without being physical (although the whole being pressed against each other behind the shed and the heavy breathing lol). It's like their brains are falling in love with each other and their bodies arent aware of it yet (does that make sense? I dunno. I'm tired). Ugh, what I'm trying to say is that they communicate on a whole different level, their souls are drawn to each other but they're not aware of it yet (does that make more sense?)
I like Sharon, I like how she's not intimidating. She doesnt evoke any emotions, shes kind of neutral to the story. You don't love her, and you dont hate her, she's kind of just there. which is how I think Ger thinks of her too. It doesn't look like he's overly attached to her, she's just there. She doesnt even know he goes to the museum. And that's why I think he's drawn to Jay, she shares his world. When they're together, it's literally like they have a world of their own.
Makes me wonder, can soul mates be lovers? cuz that's how they feel to me, like soul mates. But can they fall in love and actually function in the real world as a couple? Hmmhm time will tell I suppose. Im curious where this is headed, he has a girl, yet he gets a 'look' when shes around according to Bob. And he gazes into her eyes and does dishes. Which is the way males are trying to show you they're in love. guys dont do dishes just cause. It doesnt happen. I like how Sharon picked up on how unusual that is, yet Jay is all ya no biggie.
Now I have to go before I pass out on the keyboard, but I'll be back!!
First, Frankie needs to lay of the sugar. Like really for the sake of everyone involved, that kid needs to stop with the sugar. I do love him in this story. He's insane and he always makes me smile. Maybe Bob should put him on a leash or something. Control your Frankie, Bob!
Second, I love Jay's relationship with Gee. There are a lot of layers there. They became friends. They're intimate without being physical (although the whole being pressed against each other behind the shed and the heavy breathing lol). It's like their brains are falling in love with each other and their bodies arent aware of it yet (does that make sense? I dunno. I'm tired). Ugh, what I'm trying to say is that they communicate on a whole different level, their souls are drawn to each other but they're not aware of it yet (does that make more sense?)
I like Sharon, I like how she's not intimidating. She doesnt evoke any emotions, shes kind of neutral to the story. You don't love her, and you dont hate her, she's kind of just there. which is how I think Ger thinks of her too. It doesn't look like he's overly attached to her, she's just there. She doesnt even know he goes to the museum. And that's why I think he's drawn to Jay, she shares his world. When they're together, it's literally like they have a world of their own.
Makes me wonder, can soul mates be lovers? cuz that's how they feel to me, like soul mates. But can they fall in love and actually function in the real world as a couple? Hmmhm time will tell I suppose. Im curious where this is headed, he has a girl, yet he gets a 'look' when shes around according to Bob. And he gazes into her eyes and does dishes. Which is the way males are trying to show you they're in love. guys dont do dishes just cause. It doesnt happen. I like how Sharon picked up on how unusual that is, yet Jay is all ya no biggie.
Now I have to go before I pass out on the keyboard, but I'll be back!!
@Dark Violet
You wondered where to begin? Where do I begin??? I am so beyond flabbergasted at BOTH of your posts!!! I think you just gave me the biggest grin when I read them both!!! Ermahgerd I LOVE you, simple hands down fact. Moving on!!! I couldn't agree more! I love it when authors and readers are able to connect and interact more then just putting one another into their stories! I not only feed off of the feedback that I get, it doesn't only boost my moral and drive me to write until my fingers become nubs it also gives me the greatest ideas! It fuels me, it gives me a huge rush to hear from people and to form relationships over something like reading, writing and our favorite character!!!
And yes, I was trying to do just that!!! You are the first person (well at least who has written and told me) that has gotten what I was trying to subtly hint at!!! It's not about money, it's not about status or even things. I wanted to show that how humble beginnings and foundations mixed with a little hard work and force of will can really make someone who they are. There's a lot of love and good things to be had from places like Reta's Diner in my story! And I am glad that I was able to help restore your faith in humanity!!
And yes, he has a girlfriend. *gets out defib paddles* Nooo, not your wee little fan girl heart! LIVE damn it!!! And while she's falling, it's not necessarily for him. It's more for his words. But you will see as the story develops how his having a relationship works into things. I hope that I keep your faith as I post and write more!!! And no she isn't upset, she has more things on her mind that take presidence at the moment .
And thank you about the pictures, they're really are my favorite part to write (along with the journal entries) in the story. It allows me to not only give Jay subtle depth as a character, but it also allows me to put a little of myself into my character in a way that people will enjoy and not immediately label as "author's self". And yes, his slight slip of a smile from time to time allowed me to make him a bit deeper. To put it in the words of Shrek, "I gave him layers, like an onion". And maybe as the story unveils you'll understand more of why he isn't as happy go lucky as he'd like us all to think.
And when it comes to Jay you are completely correct!!! I am making her brighter, funnier and more "alive" as she finds herself. I'm taking away the grey, the autopilot way of life, as she becomes more of who she is meant to be. And yes, that haircut was more about an internal and now external transformation rather than a feel good pick me up. I'm so happy you are picking up on those things I could literally SQUEEE myself to pieces!!! And now that I have written a small book in response I am going to post more!!! Good grief!!! :D
You wondered where to begin? Where do I begin??? I am so beyond flabbergasted at BOTH of your posts!!! I think you just gave me the biggest grin when I read them both!!! Ermahgerd I LOVE you, simple hands down fact. Moving on!!! I couldn't agree more! I love it when authors and readers are able to connect and interact more then just putting one another into their stories! I not only feed off of the feedback that I get, it doesn't only boost my moral and drive me to write until my fingers become nubs it also gives me the greatest ideas! It fuels me, it gives me a huge rush to hear from people and to form relationships over something like reading, writing and our favorite character!!!
And yes, I was trying to do just that!!! You are the first person (well at least who has written and told me) that has gotten what I was trying to subtly hint at!!! It's not about money, it's not about status or even things. I wanted to show that how humble beginnings and foundations mixed with a little hard work and force of will can really make someone who they are. There's a lot of love and good things to be had from places like Reta's Diner in my story! And I am glad that I was able to help restore your faith in humanity!!
And yes, he has a girlfriend. *gets out defib paddles* Nooo, not your wee little fan girl heart! LIVE damn it!!! And while she's falling, it's not necessarily for him. It's more for his words. But you will see as the story develops how his having a relationship works into things. I hope that I keep your faith as I post and write more!!! And no she isn't upset, she has more things on her mind that take presidence at the moment .
And thank you about the pictures, they're really are my favorite part to write (along with the journal entries) in the story. It allows me to not only give Jay subtle depth as a character, but it also allows me to put a little of myself into my character in a way that people will enjoy and not immediately label as "author's self". And yes, his slight slip of a smile from time to time allowed me to make him a bit deeper. To put it in the words of Shrek, "I gave him layers, like an onion". And maybe as the story unveils you'll understand more of why he isn't as happy go lucky as he'd like us all to think.
And when it comes to Jay you are completely correct!!! I am making her brighter, funnier and more "alive" as she finds herself. I'm taking away the grey, the autopilot way of life, as she becomes more of who she is meant to be. And yes, that haircut was more about an internal and now external transformation rather than a feel good pick me up. I'm so happy you are picking up on those things I could literally SQUEEE myself to pieces!!! And now that I have written a small book in response I am going to post more!!! Good grief!!! :D
Oh boy where do I begin....
Gerard has a girlfriend?! My little fan girl heart died a little bit, but I think this is good for future development, since Jay mentioned she's falling for him...lol that was a chapter packed full of information, like she said she's falling for him, and he has a girlfriend. I love that she's not upset by the fact he has a girl, it shows to me that shes more focused on finding who she is then a boy toy. I admore that about her, so many girls wouldve got side tracked by now.
I also love how you describe the pics she takes, I think it's a very subtle way of you as the writer to give more dimention without being too obvious and predictable about it. Like that line about Gerard's smile slipping when no ones looking, I loved it cuz I got some deeper insight about him as a person but I still dont know why he's not as happy go lucky as he'd like us to think.
And I notice how the more she finds herself the funnier she becomes. Before it felt like everything was grey and she was going through the motions and now shes coming to life and adds a little color, which is why I adore the hair change. I saw it more then just a feel good haircut, its a deeper transformation. She coulve went blonde or brown or black but instead it was red, she's coming back to life.
Gerard has a girlfriend?! My little fan girl heart died a little bit, but I think this is good for future development, since Jay mentioned she's falling for him...lol that was a chapter packed full of information, like she said she's falling for him, and he has a girlfriend. I love that she's not upset by the fact he has a girl, it shows to me that shes more focused on finding who she is then a boy toy. I admore that about her, so many girls wouldve got side tracked by now.
I also love how you describe the pics she takes, I think it's a very subtle way of you as the writer to give more dimention without being too obvious and predictable about it. Like that line about Gerard's smile slipping when no ones looking, I loved it cuz I got some deeper insight about him as a person but I still dont know why he's not as happy go lucky as he'd like us to think.
And I notice how the more she finds herself the funnier she becomes. Before it felt like everything was grey and she was going through the motions and now shes coming to life and adds a little color, which is why I adore the hair change. I saw it more then just a feel good haircut, its a deeper transformation. She coulve went blonde or brown or black but instead it was red, she's coming back to life.
@Burnt_Bridges_Fall
Oh it's awesome to recieve such a detailed reply, I like it when authors are involved with readers, not casting them in a story, but more so bouncing ideas off each other and discussing the story. I think thats my favorite part of belonging to a fan fic website. I get inspired a lot from feedback.
And the corporate ladder is a wonderful place...for some people, but I love the message that happiness in life doesnt come from money, or status, or things. You can find happiness in a little diner, as long as you're willing to find it. I love that msg, just the fact that you're writing about it restores my faith in humanity.
I just picture Jay in my head as this little flower child.
Bleh, I babble a lot! And you updated so I'm gonna shut up and keep on reading!
Oh it's awesome to recieve such a detailed reply, I like it when authors are involved with readers, not casting them in a story, but more so bouncing ideas off each other and discussing the story. I think thats my favorite part of belonging to a fan fic website. I get inspired a lot from feedback.
And the corporate ladder is a wonderful place...for some people, but I love the message that happiness in life doesnt come from money, or status, or things. You can find happiness in a little diner, as long as you're willing to find it. I love that msg, just the fact that you're writing about it restores my faith in humanity.
I just picture Jay in my head as this little flower child.
Bleh, I babble a lot! And you updated so I'm gonna shut up and keep on reading!
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Sorry I kinda went MIA on you! People are stupid, especially on the Internet. They dont have to face the person they're being mean to so anything goes, its easy to forget that there's a person on the other side and you're not just talking to a high tech screen. Ugh, especially this generation. LOL yes I'm gonna rant about this generation, I dont mean to disrespect or anything, I'm just speaking from what I see from nieces and nephews and their friends so random teens of the web dont bite my head off!
It's just seems like they all glued to a different screen, there's no epathy or empathy. Human emotions have just been downgraded. As a proud child of the 90's I think we're the last kids to play outside, we're the generation that made being different the norm.
Anyways, it's my bday next week. I guess thats why I'm all GO 90's lol. Ignore me. Please do. It's not even about the story.
What I was trying to say before I went totally off topic is dont listen to anyone who says your writing sucks or anything of that sort. I mean, constructive critism is always good to build and develop you as a writer, and others can give some more insights on your story and what flows better but ignore anyone who doesnt have anything semi educated to say about your writing. In my humble opinion, you have a rare gift.
Anyone can tell a story *coughahemsparklyvampirescoughchockedbyangrymobofteens* but it takes a gifted individual to turn even a fictional story into reality, for even just the 10 min it takes you to read a chapter. It doesnt matter what story you're telling, as long as you manage to craft is so well that the reader is left with feelings and thoughts and life lessons even after they finished reading. If a certain sentence makes them pause and think about it or laugh than you have a gift, and I think you do. Jay and Gerard are real to me, for the time I'm reading the story, I'm right there with them, looking through their eyes, hearing their voices. They're real to me.
I think alcohol is a truth serum in a way (a truth serum that makes you do stupid shit sometimes like jumping off a roof into a trampoline...lol the formula hasnt been perfected). I think to a certain extent it brings the genuine person outta you, the one that isnt worried about what other people think, the one beneath all the secret layers society and we put on ourselves to be a functioning adults...
Whoa I rambled like it was going out of style! Sorry! feel free to ignore me. And update!!! please
1/25/13