S-I-N, I, S-I-N - Comments - My Chemical Romance Fanfiction

Great story!!

Jackie
11/14/17

@Electric_Revenge
You're welcome, keep up the good work! (also laughing at how long I discussed Gerard's dick size in the comment)

DreamsInOblivion
1/13/15

@PayingInNaivety
Hey and thanks, it's nice to get some feedback and genuine thought. I got chapter seventeen edited by someone else since I didn't have the time and they ended up making some changes that I didn't particularly agree with then after some thought changed it but only the copy on Wattpad so this is basically the whole story and its earliest and worst.

I'll be going over this story at some point with a scrubbing brush and cleaning it up so it's good to have comments like this to show me what I need to focus on.

cheers.

Electric_Revenge
1/10/15

That first sex scene makes my list for the hottest I've ever read (and you have no idea how much dramione (harry potter ship name) I've read. The reason I point out dramione is because there are SO many AMAZING writers within that subsection so if I compare you to them that is a good thing :) However, I think you got the measurements wrong on Gerard's dick size. 10 inches is beyond ridiculous, the female uterus is only 5-7 inches. I know you are from England though (Lainy said 'mum' instead of 'mom' and 'queue' instead of 'line' and 'jumper' instead of 'sweater' even though she's supposed to be American but those were the only idiosyncrasies I've caught other than that you did a really good job using American lingo the time she said 'mum' was the first time I even thought you may not be American) so that's understandable that you misjudged the conversion but 10 inches is about 25 centimeters (the average male penis is 5.6inches or 14.2cm). Having been someone who has lost their V-card there is no way in hell 10 inches would be at all pleasant... It is a mere two inches short of sticking a ruler (1 foot or 12 inches or 33cm) up my vagina (yeah ow). That just took me out of the REALLY nice sex scene a bit so perhaps maybe have him be around 7.5 inches? (19cm) That way he is a VERY well endowed, while still being realistic. Other than that I thoroughly enjoyed your story (I love the premiss of Gerard being a Priest, a nice change up to the usual Teacher Gerard), update the sequel soon please :)

DreamsInOblivion
1/10/15

That's rad! I'm going to the Melbourne one ^~^