An Urgent Need for Ruin (Full-length Novel Version) - Comments

Yes, lack of eye candy! This Ray Toro clone is like totally gay so like im kind of stuck with hoping a frank or gerard spawn comes to my school. It's kinda ironic how I don't know one kid named frank but, I know like 4 people named frankie. Yes, that is their name..not a nickname.
but, Toro taxes?? Wtf what town is this in?! Who even..I'm dead. Oh well, their is a 'Mikey and shays' restaurant in our town...and my dads name is Michael and my sisters is shaylah...
oh, and hell yes! Every time I hear a freaking piano note I am instantly waiting for black parade to play. It's such a miracle it came on the radio last night though cause all that channel I have to listen to plays is pop-shit.

@tatethecake
Lack of eye candy? You have a Ray-freakin'-Toro clone. Lucky. The closest we have to Ray over here is a place called Toro Taxes. My lil bro constantly makes jokes about an accountant fro.
My head shoots up every time I hear a single piano note. They have us conditioned.

I'm listening to the radio and the black parade is on...
am I allowed to cry? This is a miracle.

Ha! Gee-across-the-street! I wanna know what who this 'creep' is. Oh! There is this kid Wyatt in my drama class who looks exactly like Ray Toro and I call him my ray-of-sunshine. The thing is he knows exactly who I am comparing him to and he just laughs every Time. Why can't there be any frank and Gerard spawns at my school? *cries from lack of eyecandy*

@tatethecake
PFFFT! I know, right?
Their interactions are partially based off everything that's happened between me and "Gee-across-the-street," who is gorgeous but creepy.

The girl has a point! I don't see how anyone. Even if frank was some weird kid, could not be attracted to hit Hot motherf-Ing.
face. Ahh nothing traumatic, my little fan girl heart can't take the pain.

@tatethecake
I will warn you that you'll never see it coming. Well, aside from the fact that you already know.
One of my friends was like "Oh, wow. Here I am writing this story and this girl is going all gaga over the guy and loses her head and here you are with Toni like 'HELL NO STRANGER DANGER.'" I told them "Well duh. Toni is an obnoxious ice queen, so..." XD

Ahh I want to know how he dies! But, at the right time. Toni's narration is actually quite funny.

@tatethecake
Very very true.
And the prologue is there for a reason, sadly. I am glad, however that so many people seem to like knowing from the very beginning that there's main character death. (Frank is the real main character. Don't let Toni's awful narration fool you.)

You can't control the way the reader takes the characters opinions, and they should know its fanFICTION for a reason.
ugh, it's kind of hard. The whole story writing thing. oh wwhhhaallee.
P.S. I can't stop rereading the part in your comment that says 'until it's too late'. A peice of my bulletproof heart dies everytime.

@tatethecake
Oh my gosh, thank you! That is very very good to know. I always worry that people just think I'm on a soapbox when it comes to my main characters and that I think like that or am that snobbish, when really I'm just trying to relate to them while still trying to not annoy the reader out of reading.
It honestly mentally hurts the snobbishness that Toni always holds against Frank until it's too late.
So so glad everything's working smoothly. Huge sigh of relief.

Everybody is narrow minded when they are young. I personally think that is the best part about the fic because it gives a little bit more of a interesting feel to it.
P.s even though my aunts and uncles have thoughts accents sometimes I still need to read the subtitles on swamp people. Ugh.

@tatethecake
Thanks! That's awesome to hear.
I watch Swamp People a lot and always laugh that there are subtitles 'cause I can understand everyone perfectly, but that probably just comes from growing up surrounded by Cajuns. I actually lived in Louisiana for a bit and it's always been one of my favourite accents. Glad I'm doing it justice.
Also really good to hear it has you on the edge of your seat. I was hoping this wasn't too Twilighty (especially since the real plot is far far from it, but that comes later) and annoying since Toni is especially hard to make a likeable main character. She's quite narrowminded.

Yay, that's great. This is actually really good and it has me sitting on the edge of my seat waiting and it's kinda funny cause my aunts and uncles have those same accents..you do a good job at writing 'em.

@tatethecake

Thanks! Working on chapter seven now. Lots of view outside of Toni's small-minded world and lots of character development. New characters ahoy!

Ah, this is good. Dont stop now darlin, its a fine story.

@IronMaddlyn
The first part of chapter six is up now. MAN, this chapter is a monster. But an important one.

@Clockwork.Sanity

I very glad to hear you're continuing this! Oh, and you're welcome.

@Clockwork.Sanity

I very glad to hear you're continuing this! Oh, and you're welcome.

@IronMaddlyn
Oh, wow..... THANK YOU SO MUCH!
I am currently working on chapter 6 (which you'll definitely like a lot). Don't worry. I have no intention of giving up this story. I plan to publish it someday; it has a message that needs to be shared.
Thank you again for such a sweet comment! :)