It all started with a Hello - Comments

@The Resurrectionist
Thanks so much!

i lov this !!

@Gee'sCLUELESSgirl!
Thanks for the feedback! I do have to work on the editing. It is still very rough. I am coming back after a day or two to see if it makes sense.

Interesting start. I think you need to be careful and edit your chapters more, for instance, I don't think this sentence was what you meant...

~I move out of Brad and look out my window.~

...it would've been funny if you DID mean that, but no. There were a few other mistakes in there, but that's the one that stood out to me.

i really do like this start though, and I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.
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