Merci Pour Le Venin. - Comments

Gee didnt do meth, just cocaine, pot, xanax (for depression), and he still does weed as i recall

please update :D maybe...... please?

Oooh.. sexy

@Sazzie
Loved it! Length was perfect with this kind of scene! Definately perfect! This length works for you, and the details... Wow.. You've grown so much as a writer! Good-job!
xoxo
~Luna

@Luna I agree about the details - sometimes I worry about over describing but I have reading "he said, she said, then he said" constantly, it's such a pet peeve of mine with writing and reading.
& I'll try in the future for that tip! Sometimes I just get stuck in the plot and try to have a different stepping stone for each chapter - if that makes sense.

-Sazzie
xo

Definitely good. The chapter is a bit longer than your others, and I can see you're trying. I'll help you out. When you think you wrote a good length, write about 4 more paragraphs. Or you can write like you have there in chapter 3 and then combine 2 chapters. Or add more details. I would not suggest more details because you have the write amount of details for your story. So don't do that. I will say with the way you have it now, you definitely keep me on the edge of my seat waiting for more!
xoxo
~Luna

I... I need more o-o

Yes. More pleez.

@Luna
Ah, I managed to edit it so it looked nicer - in Word the paragraphs were indented and everything, so I just copied and pasted. Looks like it didn't work though, so it's fixed now :')
& I know, it took me ages to write that, I write and delete over and over until I'm somewhat okay with what I wrote haha. I'll work on making the next chapter longer :3

-Sazzie
xo

I love it! Only complaint.. The chapters could be longer.
Ummm... Suggestions? Hit enter twice when you want to start a new paragraph. Just makes it look better. Ummmm.... That's it really. I really do like it! Update soon!
XOXO
~Luna

UPDATE IMMEDIATELY!!

~Cyanide~