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Yeah.

Yes!! I fricken LOVE Panic! At the Disco!!!

Lol, thank you! :D

@My Chemical Romance Lover

I LOVE THIS SHIT!!!!!!! :D NEVER STOP!!!!!!!!!!

Haha yep.

@tashi_way

ohhhh no. now shes gonna lead them both on. This isn't going to turn out well, bandmate against bandmate

splendid, can't wait for the next update

yay cx

Haha okay!


@tashi_way

gahhh update!!!

Dude, lets have sweets
dude, lets eat cake
dude, bring me alcohol
dude, me too
dude, i want wine
dude, gimme shots
dude, lets go canada
dude, lets go australia
dude, bring me the holy grail
dude, lets go to the fucking moon!
dude, no we wanna go pluto and freeze!!!

Thanks!!!

@MyChemicalRomanceFrankie

Fucking amazing!!! :D

Coolz coolz coolz coolz coolz!!!!!!!!

@EllsBells
Yeah!!!!! Thank you :)

So good, dont care about mispellings cause i <3 it!!

@RachelMisery867
Thank you!!!! :)

This is really good so far. There are a few misspellings, nothing too big, and a few places where your words seemed jumbled together due to lack of punctuation. You also used the word "eliminated" when she first comes into the apartment, but I think you mean "illuminated." Also, this is just me, but I personally hate time lapses. I usually put in something like, "Later that night, I was doing blah blah blah..." to make a better transition and keep the flow, but time lapses work the same way, I guess. It's up to you. Other than that, this is good so far and I can't wait for an update! I hope I helped :D
-RachelMisery867